24 Hour Flash Fiction Posting: My Son, the Parrot

Here's a flash fiction piece I'm working on. This is the third draft. I hope you enjoy it. As always, comments are welcome and will be retained, even when the story is deleted.

Thanks for reading and enjoy!




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  1. Jim Higgiins (xstatic)May 16, 2012 at 8:58 PM

    Justin, I find this interesting, and since the baby character can't talk, I suppose you have to tell more than show, but that makes it sound a little stilted to me. The mother's emotions come across as real, as does he patience in flollowing the Doc's instructions.

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  2. Justin W. PriceMay 25, 2012 at 11:16 AM

    Thanks you, Jim for your input.

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